Tanmay's response lacks personalization and specificity, as it does not mention his educational background or relevant skills in data analysis and statistics. The benchmark response effectively highlights the candidate's education, practical experience, and enthusiasm for data engineering, which Tanmay's response should emulate. To improve, Tanmay should include details about his educational qualifications, specific tools he has worked with, and his eagerness to grow in the data engineering field, similar to the benchmark response.